In reflection from the feedback I received from my previous elevator pitch, I noticed a lot of people telling me to change the camera angle and to not talk as much with my hands. Another person commented that my previous pitch also sounded more like I was brainstorming.
I took all this advice into account by making sure I wasn't in an environment that would distract the viewer from what I was saying, as well as trying to make sure I wasn't moving too much; granted I usually talk with my hands. I also tried to reword my pitch a little and adjust the tone in order to sound like a more firm idea.
Cheyenne, I think you have a great idea! I know I would definitely benefit from using this; I recently had to take my car in because the engine kept overheating, but I had no idea what actually happened. You must have really improved your pitch, because it sounds great! You are very clear about the app and your body language was appropriate. Feel free to check out my pitch: http://emilysentblog.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
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ReplyDeleteYou did an excellent job with your pitch! Maybe just talk a tad bit slower but other than that I think it was awesome! Also, your idea is genius. I know that I, personally, and many others would benefit from this product. It is hard being a female and going to an auto repair shop and the workers not trying to take advantage of your little knowledge you have about cars. Also the workers could benefit just as you said by knowing beforehand a little more about the car they are about to work on. Thanks again for sharing and keep up the good work! Feel free to check out my blog at